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Diner

twilliams

twilliams

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I’m a few days into this - a local diner. Have I shared this, yet? Couldn’t find any posts.

i enjoy painting local scenes. This view is standing just outside the door around 6:00 a.m.

There’s an element of Hopper in it, I suppose. Just not near as good, lol. Much more to do.

Oil. 18x24 canvas
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I don't think you posted it before. I really like it!

Did you mean the title to be DNER? Should I change it to DINER or should it stay DNER?
 
At the moment, there appears to be a lot of dark blue in that shingled wall. If the sandwich board contains colors similar to the colors inside the diner, it's slanted position would lead the eye almost directly to the people in the diner.
 
It does need something to break all that blue, it’s a large portion of the canvas. I’d be inclined to change the angle of the sandwich board so the top and bottom lines lead the eye in from left front angle. I’ve taken the liberty of showing the suggestion … hope you don’t mind!
The shape maybe needs to be even further left and a bit smaller perhaps, than the one I’ve suggested.… I’ve assumed an eye level around man’s head. IMG_0712.jpeg
 
I never mind suggestions!

Intriguing idea - seen AFTER I started developing the “what is”.

I could still change it - and will ponder. But I did more peripheral work today.

Lighting changes that uniform blue…it’s not as stark as in some photos And not as bright as it is here…
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Hmmmmm.....

I can understand why you might want it to be a blackboard but that's dark on dark.

I assume the local diner is painted dark blue and the blackboard is, well, a blackboard. But the effect of that, as I watch how my eye moves around the image, is to shrink the image down to the rectangle with the people. Everything else becomes a frame, essentially, for that one rectangle.

If that is your intent, then the design works. If not, then including sufficient detail elsewhere in the painting to provide interest and stop the eye might be a good idea.
 
Lol Tom, sorry it wasn’t easy to see … the iPad edit wouldn’t give me white and lightening the colour just thinned it!
As I always say, the work is yours and you must decide regardless of others’ thoughts. Have confidence in yourself.👍🙂
 
I do love a good Hopper style, I thought the same as Maureen before you mentioned it so you're on point. I love your palette and the composition, but agree the large blue and brown roof sections seem to segment the zones too much rather than leading the eye in like mentioned before. I'd love to see more details in the blue wall and billboard, just enough to entice me to look further. Even shadows in shadow to intrigue. Should be a good piece to complete
 
Brian said:
Hmmmmm.....

I can understand why you might want it to be a blackboard but that's dark on dark.

I assume the local diner is painted dark blue and the blackboard is, well, a blackboard. But the effect of that, as I watch how my eye moves around the image, is to shrink the image down to the rectangle with the people. Everything else becomes a frame, essentially, for that one rectangle.

If that is your intent, then the design works. If not, then including sufficient detail elsewhere in the painting to provide interest and stop the eye might be a good idea.
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The original plan was the dark edges … but as I develop the painting, I am considering options. The building is grey - but it’s very early in the morning and appears this bluish color.
 
Gluggy said:
I do love a good Hopper style, I thought the same as Maureen before you mentioned it so you're on point. I love your palette and the composition, but agree the large blue and brown roof sections seem to segment the zones too much rather than leading the eye in like mentioned before. I'd love to see more details in the blue wall and billboard, just enough to entice me to look further. Even shadows in shadow to intrigue. Should be a good piece to complete
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I think I am headed in that direction, yes. In an earlier stage I had more of the shingles visible and will build that back in. There’s also the hint of a small planter in a few reference photos - that’ll several to add interest.
 
Looking good. The sign in the window is a great addition because it adds motion to the image instead of the eye just going to that upper right rectangle. Now there's a triangle made up of the sigh, the blackboard below, and the people. :(
 
My attention to details hasn't been the greatest...better said, my precision with straight lines and sharp edges. I'm on the fence as to how important these are ... I'd prefer it to be a pit "painterly" but am not sure how to do this w/o having it look sloppy.
 
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